“Your Records Say”: Sea Changes (Kifo Island Chronicles Volume 1) for WIPpet Wednesday

Welcome to WIPpet Wednesday, a weekly blog hop which encourages writers to move WIPs (works-in-progress) to publication by posting excerpts related to the date.We're led by the capable fingers and nimble mind of Emily Witt.

I’ve finally gotten caught up enough after my NaNo exertions and flurries of family activities to start to work a bit ahead on my blogging. It’s early Thursday morning, and I’ve spent the last few weeks scraping posts together last minute, if at all.

So, even though it’s very early to be setting up next week’s WIPpet, I’m going ahead with it, because I’d rather be early than late, and maybe I can start something of a trend that might become a habit before April and another NaNo roll around…

On that note, let’s dive in, shall we?


We’re back to Ava Garcia  in Sea Changes.

Ava grew on me during the writing of her story. She was a constant revelation. Her struggle is compelling. For me, it goes beyond the issue of whether people should be allowed to choose the manner of their death. She encapsulates my personal attitudes about how children deserve to be treated. It’s an honor to share her voice with you!

The Premise:

In advocating for a dying girl seeking emancipation from controlling parents, can an overburdened young woman and a lonely young man find a future together?

Note:

This passage has been rough-edited (trust me, you don’t want to see the muddled-beyond-hope original version! My plan is to begin creating a more structured revision plan once the 24 scenes pass through my local crit group (which isn’t happening, at the moment. Post NaNo, I expect to pick up steam for the next few months.)

Your input is gratefully accepted, and might go a long way toward making this a better novel!

Context:

Donovan is helping Ava in the aftermath of a nosebleed, and her computer just signaled an incoming call, and he offered to answer for her.

WIPpet Math:

  • Today is December 14, 2016

  • I've got 2 very short paragraphs today one for each day in the date.

Your Records Say”

No, don't. I'm not ever likely not to be too tired to take that particular call.” She grimaced.

Donovan didn’t comment on that. “Your records say you like to – and chew on the ice.”

Will Ava chew ice?

Who’s calling?

Is it someone Ava will want to talk to?

What’s next?

Next week, we’ll learn a little more.

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